Specific Organization
Intro 10 pts
-Opener
-Overview of topic
-Article Information for each article
-----Author (bias and credentials)
-----Title of aritcle and journal
-----Date of publication
-Thesis-statement of your reaction to the issues that will be critiqued in the response-thesis must clearly focus on the article
Summary-One Paragraph 20 pts
-Restates author and title
-Lists major points in order of article
-Does not editorialize
-Does not include quotations (unless absolutely necessary)
-Length is appropriate for points made in the article
Response 50 pts
-Is organized according to points made in the summary or ethos, pathos, and logos appeals as indicated in the summary
-Has coherent structure with smooth transitions
-Uses appropriate quotations and other textual evidence from the article to support thesis
-Has appropriate balance between article and personal response (at least one quotation per paragraph)
-----Clearly responds to quotations
-----Keeps focus on response thesis
-----Keeps attention on article-does not add points that are not included in the article
-Writing is clear and succinct-free of excess words
-Other issues
-----Includes analysis of the writer's bias
-----Includes statement of the writer's credentials
Conclusion 10 pts
-Restates thesis (idea)
-Summarizes major points as discussed in the article
-Provides closure
Format 10 pts
MLA Format
-Citation of quotations
-Works cited
GUMP
-Free of serious erros-less than two per page
Thursday, February 25, 2010
Peer Eval--Practice
Inside ScientologyÓ by Janet Reitman
Scientology is the world’s fastest growing religion with ten million members in one hundred and fifty-nine countries. Scientology means “the study of truth” and was founded by L. Ron Hubbard. Scientologists believe that many years ago an evil galatic warlord named Xenu controlled seventy-six planets in this corner of the Galaxy, each of which was severly overpopulated (Reitman par. 30). Xenu took 13.5 trillion beings and flew them to earth where he then dropped them into volcanoes around the globe and vaporized with bombs. This scattered the souls, or what scientologists called thetans, until they were caught by electronic traps and implanted with a number of false ideas including concepts of God and Christianity. Then, these thetans, attached themselves to humans which creates emotional and physical problems and also the problems of our world today. These beliefs are the main beliefs of the religion of Scientology today. “Inside Scientology” by Janet Reitman was published in Rolling Stone Magazine on February 23 of 2006. In this article, Reitman goes inside Scientology to uncover information about this mysterious religion. Reitman has many credible sources from scholars and scientologists, logic about Scientology and what it’s really like, and uses emotion by telling stories from people who grew up in Scientology but shows some bias throughout the article to show she is against scientology. In the article “Inside Scientology” by Janet Reitman, she begins the article by telling us about Clearwater, Florida. This town is home to 8,300 scientologists who own more than two hundred businesses in Clearwater. Occupying a full square block is the largest scientology church which cost roughly $50 million with 889 rooms and six floors. Reitman tells us that Scientology is the world’s fastest growing religion with ten million members in 159 countries. Scientology was created by L. Ron Hubbard in 1954. Reitman continues by saying Scientology is the most controversial religion and is rooted in elements of Buddism, Hinduism, and some Christianity. Scientology is a belief system in which a man seeks a once perfect state by going through many rigorous processes with the intention of putting him in touch with his primordial spirit. Reitman sets out on a journey to discover the inside world of Scientology which took her nearly nine months. Much of the publicity of Scientology is due to the number of celebrities that are members, including Tom Cruise. She then interviews a girl who was born and raised in scientology named Natalie. Natalie likes Scientology and tells Reitman about the auditing process and how it works. Reitman goes on telling us about the founder of Scientology, L. Ron Hubbard. Hubbard was born in 1911 and wrote several books for his religion before he died from a stroke in 1986. The next half of Reitman’s article tells us about her visit to the Church of Scientology and how they were so welcoming in trying to get her to sign up for the starter kit. She also tells us how much each auditing session is for different levels. The next person Reitman interviews is a guy named Paul James who tells her how growing up in Scientology is like living in a bubble and that they even have their own kind of language. He also tells how Scientology brainwashes the kids and they get very personal and don’t let you have very much privacy. Jeffrey Aylor is the next person who tells Reitman the inside scoop on Scientology. He tells how he joined a top group in Scientology called the Sea Org when he was thirteen and was assigned to watch members of the Sea Org who wanted out. Many years later Jeffrey was so sick he couldn’t get out of bed but instead of getting help he was held in a room and taken to counseling where he finally got a chance to call his mom to come get him out. The final thing Reitman tells us in her article is the number of emails she got saying not to print this article, from the people she interviewed. Many of these people said that they did not want the things they said to shed a negative light on Scientology. In this article, Reitman had many credible sources ranging from people who grew up in scientology, people who left Scientology, and professors. I think Reitman did a good job at showing her audience that she did research before writing this article and had many credible sources that had lived some of their life inside Scientology. Reitman also showed her credibility by getting involved with the Church of Scientology and attempting to find out as much information as possible. One of the people Reitman interviewed for this article was Natalie who was “born and raised in Scientology” (Reitman par. 17). She also interviewed a director at the Center for the Study of Religion at UCLA, S. Scott Bartchy who tells us that Scientology is so controversial because “its forms of therapy are ‘scientific’ and that the ‘truth’ will only be revealed to those who have the money to purchase advancement to the various levels leading to ‘being clear’” (Reitman par. 26). Reitman got her audience emotionally involved in this article by using emotional stories. These stories showed her bias of being against Scientology. I believe Reiter’s audience was intended for young adults and middle aged people. I was very interested throughout this whole article and was very impressed on how Reitman kept me involved with stories from people that have been directly involved with Scientology. I also liked how Reiter starts off her article by describing Clearwater, Florida. She starts out by saying, “The faded little downtown area of Clearwater, Florida, has a beauty salon, a pizza parlor and one or two run-down bars, as well as a bunch of withered bungalows and some old storefronts that look as if they haven’t seen customers in years”, this sentence gets the reader into the mindset of how tight knit this town is and what is going on (Reitman par. 1). Although Reitman uses emotion and credibility to get her reader involved and to believe what she is writing, she also show some bias against Scientology. I first noticed this bias when I was reading and found that most of the information and quotes from people were negative toward the religion. The next time I noticed her bias was when she tells her readers of her visit to the Church of Scientology. Here she tells us that when she went there were a few things that were “jarring” to her such as the cost and Scientology rules (Reitman par.76). She also shows us her bias when she chooses the people to interview for this article. She chose one person who likes Scientology but the other two were either outcasts from Scientology or victimized by the religion. Another example of Reitman’s bias is when she is talking about Scientology’s therapy, “Scientology comes across as good, practical self-help. Rather than playing on themes that might distance a potential member, members touch on subjects that have universal appeal” (Reitman par. 75). Even though Reitman showed bias in this article she kept it subtle enough to let you chose your side on whether Scientology was for you or not. Reitman also did a good job at informing her audience. She tells us the background information on Scientology and their beliefs. Before reading this article I knew nothing about Scientology but after reading this I can make an opinion on the religion and whether or not I like it. She also did a good job at showing every aspect of the religion. She shows us the good things about Scientology by interviewing a person who likes the religion but she also shows us the view of people who have been in Scientology and strayed from the religion and the viewpoint of someone who has gone in but tried to escape but almost couldn’t. Scientology is a very controversial religion but is the world’s fastest growing religion. Scientology has nearly ten million members in 159 countries. Scientology means “the study of truth” and was created by L. Ron Hubbard. Reitman wrote this article very well with little bias in it and had very credible information, background on the religion and got her audience emotionally involved by using stories from people who were directly involved with it.
Scientology is the world’s fastest growing religion with ten million members in one hundred and fifty-nine countries. Scientology means “the study of truth” and was founded by L. Ron Hubbard. Scientologists believe that many years ago an evil galatic warlord named Xenu controlled seventy-six planets in this corner of the Galaxy, each of which was severly overpopulated (Reitman par. 30). Xenu took 13.5 trillion beings and flew them to earth where he then dropped them into volcanoes around the globe and vaporized with bombs. This scattered the souls, or what scientologists called thetans, until they were caught by electronic traps and implanted with a number of false ideas including concepts of God and Christianity. Then, these thetans, attached themselves to humans which creates emotional and physical problems and also the problems of our world today. These beliefs are the main beliefs of the religion of Scientology today. “Inside Scientology” by Janet Reitman was published in Rolling Stone Magazine on February 23 of 2006. In this article, Reitman goes inside Scientology to uncover information about this mysterious religion. Reitman has many credible sources from scholars and scientologists, logic about Scientology and what it’s really like, and uses emotion by telling stories from people who grew up in Scientology but shows some bias throughout the article to show she is against scientology. In the article “Inside Scientology” by Janet Reitman, she begins the article by telling us about Clearwater, Florida. This town is home to 8,300 scientologists who own more than two hundred businesses in Clearwater. Occupying a full square block is the largest scientology church which cost roughly $50 million with 889 rooms and six floors. Reitman tells us that Scientology is the world’s fastest growing religion with ten million members in 159 countries. Scientology was created by L. Ron Hubbard in 1954. Reitman continues by saying Scientology is the most controversial religion and is rooted in elements of Buddism, Hinduism, and some Christianity. Scientology is a belief system in which a man seeks a once perfect state by going through many rigorous processes with the intention of putting him in touch with his primordial spirit. Reitman sets out on a journey to discover the inside world of Scientology which took her nearly nine months. Much of the publicity of Scientology is due to the number of celebrities that are members, including Tom Cruise. She then interviews a girl who was born and raised in scientology named Natalie. Natalie likes Scientology and tells Reitman about the auditing process and how it works. Reitman goes on telling us about the founder of Scientology, L. Ron Hubbard. Hubbard was born in 1911 and wrote several books for his religion before he died from a stroke in 1986. The next half of Reitman’s article tells us about her visit to the Church of Scientology and how they were so welcoming in trying to get her to sign up for the starter kit. She also tells us how much each auditing session is for different levels. The next person Reitman interviews is a guy named Paul James who tells her how growing up in Scientology is like living in a bubble and that they even have their own kind of language. He also tells how Scientology brainwashes the kids and they get very personal and don’t let you have very much privacy. Jeffrey Aylor is the next person who tells Reitman the inside scoop on Scientology. He tells how he joined a top group in Scientology called the Sea Org when he was thirteen and was assigned to watch members of the Sea Org who wanted out. Many years later Jeffrey was so sick he couldn’t get out of bed but instead of getting help he was held in a room and taken to counseling where he finally got a chance to call his mom to come get him out. The final thing Reitman tells us in her article is the number of emails she got saying not to print this article, from the people she interviewed. Many of these people said that they did not want the things they said to shed a negative light on Scientology. In this article, Reitman had many credible sources ranging from people who grew up in scientology, people who left Scientology, and professors. I think Reitman did a good job at showing her audience that she did research before writing this article and had many credible sources that had lived some of their life inside Scientology. Reitman also showed her credibility by getting involved with the Church of Scientology and attempting to find out as much information as possible. One of the people Reitman interviewed for this article was Natalie who was “born and raised in Scientology” (Reitman par. 17). She also interviewed a director at the Center for the Study of Religion at UCLA, S. Scott Bartchy who tells us that Scientology is so controversial because “its forms of therapy are ‘scientific’ and that the ‘truth’ will only be revealed to those who have the money to purchase advancement to the various levels leading to ‘being clear’” (Reitman par. 26). Reitman got her audience emotionally involved in this article by using emotional stories. These stories showed her bias of being against Scientology. I believe Reiter’s audience was intended for young adults and middle aged people. I was very interested throughout this whole article and was very impressed on how Reitman kept me involved with stories from people that have been directly involved with Scientology. I also liked how Reiter starts off her article by describing Clearwater, Florida. She starts out by saying, “The faded little downtown area of Clearwater, Florida, has a beauty salon, a pizza parlor and one or two run-down bars, as well as a bunch of withered bungalows and some old storefronts that look as if they haven’t seen customers in years”, this sentence gets the reader into the mindset of how tight knit this town is and what is going on (Reitman par. 1). Although Reitman uses emotion and credibility to get her reader involved and to believe what she is writing, she also show some bias against Scientology. I first noticed this bias when I was reading and found that most of the information and quotes from people were negative toward the religion. The next time I noticed her bias was when she tells her readers of her visit to the Church of Scientology. Here she tells us that when she went there were a few things that were “jarring” to her such as the cost and Scientology rules (Reitman par.76). She also shows us her bias when she chooses the people to interview for this article. She chose one person who likes Scientology but the other two were either outcasts from Scientology or victimized by the religion. Another example of Reitman’s bias is when she is talking about Scientology’s therapy, “Scientology comes across as good, practical self-help. Rather than playing on themes that might distance a potential member, members touch on subjects that have universal appeal” (Reitman par. 75). Even though Reitman showed bias in this article she kept it subtle enough to let you chose your side on whether Scientology was for you or not. Reitman also did a good job at informing her audience. She tells us the background information on Scientology and their beliefs. Before reading this article I knew nothing about Scientology but after reading this I can make an opinion on the religion and whether or not I like it. She also did a good job at showing every aspect of the religion. She shows us the good things about Scientology by interviewing a person who likes the religion but she also shows us the view of people who have been in Scientology and strayed from the religion and the viewpoint of someone who has gone in but tried to escape but almost couldn’t. Scientology is a very controversial religion but is the world’s fastest growing religion. Scientology has nearly ten million members in 159 countries. Scientology means “the study of truth” and was created by L. Ron Hubbard. Reitman wrote this article very well with little bias in it and had very credible information, background on the religion and got her audience emotionally involved by using stories from people who were directly involved with it.
Thursday, February 18, 2010
No Class Tonight--Papers Due by 9:00
Please email your papers to me by 9:00 pm. Send them in the text of the email, not as an attachment.
I will be available from 6-9 off and on via email or text.
Have a related article for class next week along with a rough draft of your SSR2. We will add our discussion of The Other Jesus article to next week's class.
Thank you.
I've tried to contact you via email and text. The texting isn't working, and now I'm locked out of my email.
Please use alebo@spartanpride.net if you need to reach me.
Thanks!
I will be available from 6-9 off and on via email or text.
Have a related article for class next week along with a rough draft of your SSR2. We will add our discussion of The Other Jesus article to next week's class.
Thank you.
I've tried to contact you via email and text. The texting isn't working, and now I'm locked out of my email.
Please use alebo@spartanpride.net if you need to reach me.
Thanks!
Thursday, February 4, 2010
All Drafts
Plese make sure that you have an electronic copy of all drafts, or have them saved on your blogger, so we can use our online capabilities for peer reviews, feedback, etc.
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